【题目展示】
I was invited to a cookout on an old friend’s farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it. It was a hummingbird (蜂鸟), desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs (蛛网) and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.With the bird in my cupped hand, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me.When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly, Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired? Or too thirsty?As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped, and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away. Hovering (悬停), she approached within six inches of
my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window, As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, “She must have come to say good-bye.”
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph1:A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.
Paragraph2:I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
【故事脉络】
故事山是英美国家中小学阶段广泛应用的视觉阅读辅助工具，对我们理清续写材料的脉络，确定续写内容的方向很有帮助。
【故事山】
Opening:我被邀请去一个老朋友家野餐，在一间废弃的挤奶房，看到被困的蜂鸟。
Build-up:我救了那种蜂鸟，并观察发现它应该是从破掉的窗口进来了，于是用塑料把洞口堵住。
Climax:我放开双手，鸟却不飞走。鸟恋恋不舍，好久才飞走。
Resolution:野餐中，我告诉东道主，他说会修玻璃。
Ending:我准备离开时，蜂鸟认出了我，仿佛是在告别。
【谋篇布局】
段首句一：几周过后我又回到了这个农场。段首句二：我刚准备离开这时候那只蜂鸟出现了。
从段首句二我们可以得知蜂鸟不应该在第一段出现，我们从上文可以得知东道主答应我们会把窗户修补好，所以我这次来的目的大概率可以从对窗户修补的检查来入手，看他们是否履行了自己的诺言；目的也可以是我又来拜访老朋友，顺便看一下是否修补窗户。通常，按照正能量的方向发展，这个窗户应该是被补修好了。由于第一段是我再次来拜访，也可以穿插一些我与朋友之间的互动。第一段可以设置一个小矛盾，即一开始没有见到蜂鸟的失落然后第二段正准备离开时蜂鸟出现。也可以直接表达对东道主的感谢，不提到蜂鸟也可以。
第二段应该主要写我与蜂鸟之间的互动。可以通过对蜂鸟进行细节描写（外貌、动作等），再结合我的情绪与动作进行展开构思。结尾可以围绕好几个点展开，可以写蜂鸟再次与我告别，也可以定格在我与蜂鸟相知相惜。He（happy ending）和Be（Bad Ending）倒也都是可以的。点题可以从我与蜂鸟这段珍贵的相遇与回忆入手，也可以从人与自然的角度切入。
一个小提示点：上文描写蜂鸟用的是she，续写根据内容协同的要求也是要用she，而非it。
以下为3Q法助推情节发展，三个问题，方向可以多样，仅供参考。
Paragraph 1: A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.
Q1：Why did I come back again?
Q2：Did the host keep the promise? (and my feeling)
Q3：What did I do with my friends?/What did I feel when not seeing the hummingbird?
Paragraph 2: I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
react to sthQ4：What did the hummingbird do at first and at last?
Q5：What did I react when seeing the hummingbird again?
Q6：Eventually, what did I gain/feel in such an experience?
文本积累以及下水作文
【文本精彩语块积累】
1. catch one’s attention：吸引某人的注意力
2. cease one’s struggle：停止挣扎
3. pick sb. up：搭救某人
4. made no attempt to do sth.：没有试图做某事
5. let out a squeaking call：发出一声短促的尖叫
【下水作文】
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. On arrival, I approached the milking house and notice that the broken window had been completely fixed, with no sign of the danger that had once threatened the small bird. I was relieved and grateful that my friends had taken my warning to heart and taken action to protect the hummingbird. I spent the afternoon exploring the farm and chatting with my friends, hoping to catch a glimpse of the little bird. However, a ripple of sadness surged through me when not seeing the lovely creature the whole day. The night screen was to hang down.

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